Friday, June 19, 2009

A room


I was greeted by a pleasant surprise when I opened my eyes. This was no rustic farmhouse bedroom. I was lying in a king sized bed, facing a floor-to-ceiling window with a view over a simple but beautiful garden that gradually descended to a body of water dotted with small islands. It was a gray summer´s day, and I could hear the light pitter-patter of rain on the roof. It was so warm and comfortable under the covers, with the relaxing sound of the rain in the background, that I almost decided to lie there for another minute or two. Had I been anywhere else in the world, I would have stayed in bed. But not here.

Quietly, I threw the covers away and like a midwife counted the number of fingers and toes, and found that I had ten of them and everything was just like it was supposed to be, including my morning erection. I suspected someone would be taking care of it very soon.

I slipped out of the bed and stretched my body, happy to be back, and avoided thinking about my last memory, of the closing elevator doors in the Antarctic base. It was a construct, anyway; my last real memory was from Galveston. And since I was here, now, everything was fine.

The door to the living room had been left ajar. I opened it quietly, and looked around. The room was as beautiful as it had ever been, and there was a live fire in the black, upside down mushroom-shaped fireplace that hung suspended from the ceiling. A tall broad-shouldered blond was sitting in the leather couch in front of the fireplace, his back turned. A sudden warm electric feeling swelled in my chest. There he was, my man. And he had finally gotten a haircut. He realized someone was standing behind him, and turned to look over his shoulder. I couldn´t stop a gasp.

It was still him, but... intensified. It really was the only suitable word. His cheekbones were just a little higher, the eyes deeper yet brighter blue, the nose utterly flawless, and his full lips had just a little more curve to them. The jawline was identical to before, though. The original couldn´t be improved on. I thought my heart was going to stop. This man was the most beautiful thing I´d ever seen in my entire life. He flashed me the happiest smile and stood up, and I instinctively took a step back. Engineer hadn´t stopped with the face.

He stood good five inches taller than before, and his shoulders were broad and packed with muscle. In fact, the whole body was now so muscular that it came just a little shy from being a professional bodybuilder´s physique and one glance at his jeans told me that as perfect his anatomy had been before, certain enhancements must have taken place between his legs as well.

He spread his arms. “What do you think?”

I felt a huge grin spread on my face. “I think you´re going to kill me tonight.”

“Why wait?”

Effortlessly he picked me up like a doll, and carried me back to the bedroom. “Welcome back, kid.”



THE END

21 comments:

  1. I have to say, I thoroughly enjoyed this story. The sci-fi aspects are somewhat surprising/unexpected, but made the plot very malleable, something I both liked and didn't like because I didn't know if there was going to have a happy ending. This was the first time I had stopped to read some of writing versus the main blog, but like I said, I really liked it.

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  2. I really enjoy reading your story
    thanks

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  3. Always glad to hear when someone likes the story!

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  4. Excellent! I liked your story very much, although 15 years old is just to young for my tasts.

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  5. The science-fiction setting was a good surprise and you handled it extremely well. Like all good SF (thinking of the likes of Verne and Clarke) it has to be believable, someday this WILL happen. You did that. I am so glad that I found your blog. BTW, the ending is pure schmaltz, totally romantic, I LOVED it. Thanks and hugs, Johnny

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  6. thank you fot this superb book

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  7. Erik,

    Thanks for the story. I was reading your last short story when you were still posting it in chapters. I wasn't diligent enough and lost the thread. I'd been meaning to go back and read it in its entirety, but haven't had the chance. Your narrative skills and grasp of language (I assume english is not your native tongue.) were evident in that effort. I took a deep breath and sat down to read "The Snow Boy" and ended up tearing through it in one sitting. It was good and compelling and made me interested in what came next. All this and I am not much of a fan of science fiction tales. You are a deft writer and your story integrates many themes. I like that the sex is immeshed into the plot without feeling as though the in-between parts are just filler. This is stupid, but I was disappointed that Harry's character ends up being evolved into an even more attractive being at the end. You portray their relationship as being ideal. I didn't think it was necessary for him to change into something even more physically idealized. Not everything needs improving. There are couple of minor grammatical errors in various places, but I'm just picking.

    Thanks for your courage in putting it out there. Reading it brought me joy.

    Marcus

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  8. Thanks Marcus! I really appreciate to hear it when someone likes my stories. Oh yes Harry was more than sufficient the way he was, but I thought that him changing was a quick and neat way to demonstrate how his commitment to Jonatan had deepened enough to make him accept the job and allow "strangers inside his head" which was something that he truly abhorred earlier. Not that the change didn´t come with certain benefits :)

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  9. What an amazing story! Once I started reading, the plot kept pulling me in, and I couldn't stop until I finished. It was better than a lot of things I've seen in bookstores. If you ever run out of things to do, you might think about having your work published. I hope you keep writing!

    Bob

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  10. Erik,

    Thoroughly enjoyed the story. The character development was incredible, and the way the stories arced made it a true joy to read.

    You have crafted a story that provides enough descritive elements to make me actually feel that I was there witnessing the action but kept enough out for my imagination to make the action truly my own.

    I thoroughly enjoyed every moment. Looking forward to your next story.

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  11. What a great story! I particularly love the sci-fi elements, which take it to a whole new level. I write myself a bit (some of my stories are on Telemachus's site) but I'd never be able to write something as long and epic as this. I'm going to go and read your other story now, so please keep writing, you definitely have a talent for it!

    Best regards

    Tyler Bernard

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  12. Dear Erik,

    Just found and read this lovely tale. It's wonderful! Character development, sci-fi realism, moderate porn, delightful plot. It's terrific!

    I would suggest that you publish this as an e-book. Check out www.smashwords.com as a good place for undiscovered talent to self-publish. And I would love to help you with proofreading to get the little flaws into more correct English-language idiom.

    Good luck with future projects.

    Billy P
    aka Maven Stone

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  13. One of the best stories I have ever read. The inclusion of the hurricane was frighteningly close to an experience of mine. How did you come up with that element? I have so many questions, but in the end I just say Bravo! and hope you will write a sequel about Jonatan en Harry. Thank you, thank you, Pete, for this beautiful story!

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  14. This was a great story. Can't wait to see what else you come up with. I have always been drawn to the sci-fi books, but you made it feel like I was there and I can imagine everything that Jonatan was going through!

    Once again, GREAT STORY!

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  15. Superior story in every way. Please make the effort to get this one published. Can't wait for more from you. Many thanks!

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  16. Hi Erik
    I enjoyed immensely your story. It blends two topics I love: Sex & Sci-Fi.

    I like your flowing style and rich vocabulary, you give always logic explanations of the superpowers involved in the plot and everything always stick together.

    It's a really beautifull job and a big thanks to you to share it with us on the Net !

    The happy end is a bit conventional and, personnaly, my libido would prefer Jonatan a couple of years older, but this is more to pick on you than criticize.

    I will run to you next novel.

    A big Bravo & merci sexy Erik !

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  17. Wow- your approach reminds me f the great Phillip B. Dick. I hope you'll make this a series. Clearly there's a lot to explore with this world you created. Please? ;-)

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  18. Both of your stores are amazing! I really hope you write some more. They had me on the edge of my seat (with a boner) all the way through! Great work

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  19. I read both of your novels in one sitting two days ago. They stayed with me. Just wanted to say well done. I admire your powers of description, could 'see' everything in my mind's eye. And I like that the characters are three dimensional, and the plot twists here so clever. Hopefully we will see more in the future.

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